Drawing the World for my Book by Donna Galanti

By Juanedc from Zaragoza, España via Wikimedia Commons

I spent three years writing and revising my first middle grade book, Joshua and the Lightning Road. It went several rounds with a hired developmental editor and then once I got an agent and publisher, it went several more rounds. 

On the first revision my publisher’s editor wrote this:
“There is a richness missing in the manuscript and there needs to be more solid world building. Where are we? Another planet? Another town? A different world? Are these worlds like ours, but different? How? What are the differences? Lack of sun? Is the air the same? Different?” 

Ouch, right?

I needed to ground the reader in my story otherwise they would be lost. As writers, we want to use senses to ground the reader and show how they are feeling – and we need to show our story’s world through the character’s eyes.

For example:

Are you on the ground in a scene?
You could write: “The earth was all gravel beneath my feet.”

Are you inside in a tunnel?

You could write: “The stale air threatened to choke me.”
If the characters are outside there could be a breeze.

Through dialogue you can also show time and distance such as:
“Tom’s house was just two miles away…takes a day’s walk to get there…one day’s travel by horse….I hadn’t been back since last summer.”

I had a sketchy map of my world but my editor suggested I draw a more detailed map to ground myself in the story – and ground the reader. 

Here’s my amateur map of the Lost Realm of Nostos:

 

This map was passed on to the illustrator, Al Sirois, who did the map for the book. Didn’t he do an amazing job with my chicken scratch?

 

And from this I had another designer create a poster as a giveaway:

And just for fun I also carved out the figures and places from the map to create memes and scavenger hunt pieces for bookshop signing giveaways.

I discovered much from my editor’s advice in drawing a detailed map of the Lost Realm in Joshua and the Lightning Road.

Drawing a map enabled me to:

•  Correct timeline and logistic issues. 
• Build a movie of the setting in my head and see where details of the world needed enrichment. 
• Ground the reader (and me!) in the world so they didn’t get lost in the story. 
• Incorporate a map in the book to guide readers visually. 
• Make fun promotional images like memes! 
• Create exciting book events like scavenger hunts with the map’s characters and places. 
• Design a poster of the Lost Realm for giveaways.

Overall, drawing a map for the world led me to find a richer meaning in my story that spidered out into other fun ways to share my book with the world - which releases 5-19! But you can pre-order Joshua and the Lightning Road now and enter to win an iPad Mini - and the map poster.

Do you enjoy world building in your writing or in the books you read? What’s your process for world building? What are some of your favorite books with rich worlds?

Revision Technique: Book Mapping by Caroline Starr Rose

In 2009, I attended Darcy Pattison's Novel Revision Retreat. One of the many things she encouraged us to do while working with our manuscript was to check for "emotional zig-zags" within our first hundred lines. This technique Darcy developed after having a manuscript rejected for characters who felt "too flat". She determined she'd change her manuscript so that each description carried emotional weight and used Libba Bray's A GREAT AND TERRIBLE BEAUTY as a way to teach herself how to accomplish this (go read the first chapter if you haven't before. It's wonderfully done).

I was working on another manuscript at the time but came home to MAY B., the book I'd recently finished and had just sent out to agents. I decided I should look for the emotional changes within MAY and set up a chart, poem by poem, marking the topic and emotion in each. Unbeknownst to me, it was my first book map.

I first learned the term "book mapping" write reading Scholastic editor Cheryl Klein's book, SECOND SIGHT: AN EDITOR'S TALKS OF WRITING, REVISING AND PUBLISHING BOOKS FOR CHILDREN AND YOUNG ADULTS. A book map is simply a quick way to get an overview of an entire book, scene by scene. It can be plugged into an elaborate chart, showing things like point of view, setting, conflict, character growth, and "emotional zig-zags", as Darcy would say, or can be a simple list with a few words meant to remind an author (or editor) of various points along a story's path.

Cheryl asks each of her authors to create a book map of current manuscripts, and she does the same while editing their work. This helps them both see where the book moves effortlessly from scene to scene -- and the areas that need overhauling. She has a fabulous podcast about this process and other editing techniques here.

BLUE BIRDS is the only manuscript I've ever mapped in its entirety. I've jotted poem topics in a notebook; made a more formal written record of setting (both location and time), sub plots, and POV narration; typed a fancy spreadsheet version; and hastily mapped a couple dozen poems where things weren't unfolding as I'd hoped.

Like Darcy's lesson in the richness emotional complexity can bring a text, a book map can teach a writer to see what's truly happening in a book, whether they're aware of it or not. My first map showed me BLUE BIRDS, narrated by characters Alis and Kimi, leaned too heavily on Alis's point of view. The spreadsheet version I created a week before receiving my first editorial letter was a way for me to reintroduce myself to the book (I hadn't looked at it from the time it sold in April until that week in July) and spot weak areas in character development. The most recent mini map (in the last picture above) helped me through a rough portion when many story strands were coming together. I was able to see how things currently stood and where I needed to change things -- either moving poems to new places, cutting them entirely, or adding something new.

I'll confess I don't really refer to the book map once it's created, as some authors must do. It's the process itself that helps cement the book in my mind. I firmly believe the best way to find the "answers" your story needs is to go back to the story and dig them out. I promise the seed of what you need is already there. Book mapping has been an invaluable tool to examine BLUE BIRDS in a new way.

Here are some other blog posts about authors who have also used this technique:

Making a Cheryl Klein Book Map :: Sydney Salter

J.K. Rowling's Plot or Book Map for Harry Potter Five, HARRY POTTER AND THE ORDER OF THE PHOENIX :: Writing Junkie

SECOND SIGHT by Cheryl Klein :: Serendipity

Mapping Your Book to Ensure it Works :: Adventures in YA and Children's Publishing

What are some revision techniques you find helpful?