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Monday, August 14, 2017

CHARACTER PHYSICAL DESCRIPTIONS: COULD LESS BE MORE? by Hilda Eunice Burgos

“As young readers like to know ‘how people look,’ we will take this moment to give them a little sketch of the four sisters…” — Louisa May Alcott, Little Women


When I was in law school many years ago, I met periodically with a group of other female students to discuss the impact of race on our lives.  One of those discussions was about our childhood experiences as readers.  We all loved to read, and books had been important to us for as long as we could remember.

The other women of color in the group shared that, as children, they were disheartened by the fact that there were so few books, if any, where the protagonist physically resembled them.  To be able to immerse yourself in a book and step into the heroine’s shoes would be marvelous.  But these women were not able to do that.  I, on the other hand, did that all the time.

How did I manage it?  Simple (sort of).  I ignored most of the physical descriptions of the characters.   And I focused on my similarities with them.  Laura Ingalls had dark hair; well, so did I.  Jo March had three sisters; me too!  And Pippi Longstocking’s bright red hair?  Irrelevant.  I just skipped over the unimportant information about a protagonist’s blonde hair or blue eyes.  After all, anyone can have a little sister who is a pest or have a rough day at school.  So, did it matter what the character looked like?  Of course not.  This could very well be me.


My classmates were shocked to hear this.  They could never get past the fact that these books were about kids who looked different from them.  As a result, they felt ignored and unrepresented.  As a reader, I totally get that.  After all, I had to put a lot of effort into including myself in the stories I read.  As a writer, I wonder how we can embrace as many readers as possible.  Do we really need to include detailed physical descriptions of all our characters all the time?  Was Louisa May Alcott correct in saying that young readers want these descriptions?  After all, a character’s physical traits are often unimportant to the story.

My first middle grade novel is scheduled for release next year.  My main character is, like me, the daughter of immigrants from the Dominican Republic.  The things I say about her physical appearance are that she wears glasses and has frizzy hair.  Oh, and I mention that her hair is in two braids in one scene.  That’s it.  Is this enough?  In my opinion, it might be too much.

Of course there are books where a character’s physical appearance is an essential part of the story.  In my book, the protagonist’s ethnic background is important, so she must be Dominican.  While I picture my main character as looking like me, there is no reason why she has to.  She could have fair or dark skin, brown or green eyes, blonde or black hair.  None of these details would change this particular story.  So, what benefit is there to including a detailed description of her physical appearance?

To this day, when I read I skip over a lot of descriptive information about how the characters look.  Because most of the time a brown-eyed girl could have had the exact same adventure as the blue-eyed one in the book.  One rule of thumb in writing is that every word should be absolutely necessary.  Are detailed physical descriptions absolutely necessary?  Sometimes.  But not always.  And when they’re not, I leave them out.  Will my young readers be disappointed?  I hope not.

Friday, May 17, 2013

Using new settings to refresh your story, by Yahong Chi

I was in the midst of revising my current middle-grade novel when one of my beta readers gave me a piece of feedback I found enlightening. In essence, she suggested I move my protagonist to a new location and have the next plot-related event happen there. Instead of returning to the same locale, my characters could interact in, and with, a whole new setting.

This struck home in so many ways. Why? Because a well-developed new setting introduces variety; allows different character traits to develop; provides potential plot fodder; and, finally, is just plain fun to write!

It would be impossibly monotonous if your contemporary middle-grade protagonist moved from home to school and back again for the entirety of the novel, wouldn't it? Not to mention it wouldn't be very realistic. Introducing a new setting can give your world more texture and make it feel more complete. This also has the bonus of making the scene a little harder to predict, especially if you've established certain routines in other settings (e.g. get nagged at by mom at home).


People act and think differently in different places, and this can be a powerful tool in developing your characters by showing, not telling. If your protagonist is shy at school, for example, a local soccer field may be the perfect place for her or him to let their confidence grow, which could then contribute to their overall character arc. Or contrast how your outgoing social butterfly is confident when helping tutor kids at a Kumon facility but feels small and inadequate when shopping at a big mall—and why. By having your characters interact with the setting, you can show facets of their personalities in different but potent ways.

The discovery of new places is always exciting, even if it's just a hidden grove of trees in an otherwise urban city; or it could be a new planet in a sci-fi novel that sparks the entire plot. Whatever the level, introducing a new setting always comes loaded with the potential of moving the plot forward. Clues or hints can be dropped, and clandestine meet-ups can be planned. Or, conversely, epic battles could take place there, or your worst nightmare could come true. Because of the shift in setting, possibilities open themselves up in all directions.


Finally, I don't know about you, but starting a scene in a new location is always a jolt of fun for me! I get to wind new bits of description into the narration, then figure out how these characters I've created are going to react. I get to explore the new paths offered by this setting and have character relationships develop in very interesting ways in the new locale. All in all, the new setting provides a feeling of freshness, an optimistic sort of "I-haven't-tried-this-yet-so-I-haven't-messed-up-on-it-yet!" feeling.

Of course, new settings should be as well-developed as possible, and too many locations can end up confusing the reader. As always, it's all about balance. So whenever you feel like you might be suffering from writer's block, or you can't decide how to move forward, try creating a new setting.

What do you think? Do you use your settings in this way?